He surprised me when he told me that he loves me
he's cute adorable that nothing can describe him
he's sweet and romantic he's charming and amazing
he just a perfect guy for every girls
he picks me up at 7pm
i feel extremely perfect to meet him
and he says " u'r the most beautiful girl that i ever met"
and i'm blushing by the time
falling in love is like we are blind
i don't expect that
never think i could feel that way
never think i could feel that way
but i feel that we can't together
he's too perfect for me
i'm not the best for him
when i'm with him it reminds me that i can't be as good as i want
that's why i feel so
Feels like i'm always be the best thing in his eyes
i just want an ordinary guy
he's caring he's mature
i adore him so much
hero in my life
colors in my life
make my life more meaningful
can't find any incommon
but 1 thing i know about u
1 thing i know about u
u love me the way i am
he doesn't know i feel the different
i don't feel the same anymore
how can i tell him
my heart is broken
my heart is complicated
n feels like i fall in every drop of ur tears
n never can be the real me
i'll not come back
falling in love is like we are blind
i don't expect that
never think i could feel that way
but i feel that we can't together
he's too perfect for me
i'm not the best for him
when i'm with him it reminds me that i can't be as good as i want
that's why i feel so
Feels like i'm always be the best thing in his eyes
i just want an ordinary guy
I JUST WANT AN ORDINARY GUY
THAT DON'T LIKE U
uhuhuhu..
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Resensi Udo untuk puisi 'I JUST WANT AN ORDINARY GUY' karya Jessica Lolly
ReplyDeleteangka-angka sebelum kalimat adalah nomor baris dalam puisinya.
4 he just a perfect guy for every girls
-->kelupaan TO BE, mestinya: he is atau he's
8 and i'm blushing by the time
-->tak salah, hanya lebih 'poetically correct' jika memakai '..at that time..'
13 but i feel that we can't together
-->mestinya '...we can't be...'
47 I JUST WANT AN ORDINARY GUY
48 THAT DON'T LIKE U
-->kalimat rancu,
kalimat yg lebih tepat di sini adalah: I JUST WANT AN ORDINARY GUY THAT'S NOT LIKE U
Sebenarnya cuma masalah kecil sih, tapi karena kamu ask for corrections, ya aku berikan..
My opinion remain: you got a good stuff. Carry on.
oia jg yaa
ReplyDeletehehe but out of those, it's good enough rite?
=)